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Who says writers aren’t artists? Well, no one, I hope. But in case you have doubts, and you’re in the Orlando area, several Prevail Press authors are participating in Metro Life’s 2nd Annual Art Show THIS SATURDAY from 4-9!
Metro Life Church is in beautiful Casselberry, FL, at the juncture of Red Bug Lake Road and Winter Park Drive (if you know where Buffalo Wild Wings is in Casselberry, you’re almost there).
Metro Life is an amazing church that is all about growing the individual in all aspects of development, from spiritual, emotional, physical (if you like basketball), and the creative arts.
Metro has opened their doors to artists of all kinds, from fabulous painters, sculptors, photographers, folk artists, fine artists, and authors. This year, performing artists have a gallery of their own.
And of course, there will be Author’s Row, a book signing with local authors. Our Prevail Press heroes will be:
Bonnie Anderson (ask her about her new book that will be coming out soon).
Bill Hufford (brand new book on culture change).
Tom and Debi Walter (fresh from the airport. Or not so fresh, you tell us).
Aron Osborne (ask him about his podcasts related to his book).
Robert Alexander Swanson (that’s me, with my newest book about creativity… at an art show, don’t you love the synchronicity?)
There will be cheese, punch, cookies, and ART!
If you’re in Orlando, come join us, you’ll be glad you did.
I had the privilege of joining Mike Gilland on the radio to promote both Metro Life’s 2nd Annual Art Show and my book Creativity Wears Boots.
Mike’s show, Afternoons with Mike, is on the Shepard Radio at 1270 AM on the radio dial andhttps://www.theshepherdradio.com/ on the web. He was kind enough to invite me on and if you missed it, you can hear it here, right now!
Mike is the ultimate professional and I probably let my mind get ahead of my mouth several times, so any incoherence is on me, not Mike. Enjoy and see you at the Art Show this Saturday, Dec. 7th between 4 and 9 PM. It’s an open house, you don’t have to stay through it all, but you just might want to with the performing arts on display in the Alive Gallery!
In first-person narrative, your character tells the story. In third-person narrative, an unidentified narrator tells the story.
First or third-person, you need to know your narrator to
make sure it’s a unified, consistent voice.
That’s a little easier with first-person because you’re
developing that character for us. In all but the unreliable narrator*, your third-person
character is whole at the start of the story, just unseen.
Hallmarks of the invisible narrator include:
Consistent vocabulary, reading level, rhythm, narrative
distance, and word-choice.
Trustworthiness is achieved by accurately telling the story,
placing reveals in the proper order (when the reader needs and not after the fact),
and not spieling off into irrelevant prose. The trustworthy narrator is concise
and complete, but not pedantic or over-explaining. This is also true for the first-person
The competent narrator understands the subject matter, using
appropriate language correctly. In a sci-fi novel, the narrator has to
competently handle the concepts and technology of the story. They psychological
thriller must have an insightful narrator who can relate complex concepts with
an approachable style, but clear understanding of it. For the first-person
narrator, competency may begin low and build to competency, which is an effective
storytelling device and sometimes may tell you if your narrator should be first-
Trust and competence are like butlers; they are noticeable only
when a mistake is made. (There’s a story about a director struggling with a
supporting character, a butler, who was finding every means to take the
spotlight. The director finally asked him, “John, are you playing a good butler?”
“Why, I’m playing the best butler!” “Excellent. Great butlers are invisible.
Make it so.”)
Use of language is often visible in a tingling kind of way.
You never want your prose to pull the reader out of the story, yet you do want
the occasional thrill at the back of the reader’s mind. This is done with the occasional,
consistent metaphor. “His heart pounded a paradiddle on the snare drum of his
chest.” Paradiddle is a musical term,
suggesting the narrator should stick with artistic metaphors. She should NOT
throw in nautical metaphors unless the story is suddenly in an oceanic setting.
That doesn’t mean metaphors must always be musical. No character is a single
thing, however, consider that few people are several major things. So your
narrator may have other, minor, metaphors and similes, but it would be wise to
make most of the metaphors artistic in this case.
Hemmingway kept his word choice to one or two syllables. Ted
Geisel was challenged to write a book with only single syllable words, and Dr.
Seuss was born. Consider the texture of your words. Crunchy, spikey, edged
words should be used as seasoning… not too much; not too little. Sticking to a
consistent rhythm makes deviations of the rhythm more powerful. Long sentences
and large paragraphs can begin to shorten to increase pace and shave to a
Narrative distance refers to how close to the characters and
actions the narrator is. Can the narrator hear the character’s thoughts? If so,
relating those thoughts need to be consistent. Is the narrator warm or cold?
Warm means close; cold means distant, that is, the descriptions are clinical,
A couple caveats:
You can use different narrators based on the chapter’s
major character as long as it’s the same narrator each time for each character
(don’t use more than a couple narrative voices). In shows and movies, certain
characters have musical themes that play when they are the focus. Same idea
Unreliable narrators first appear to be
trustworthy and competent before showing their true colors as a liar or
incomplete narrator who withholds vital information. With an unreliable narrator,
it can be the only narrator (except in rare cases). Writing a good unreliable narrator
is difficult to pull off.
One of your first editing jobs is to evaluate
the consistency of your narrator. Get this right and your story will probably
Think about your favorite stories and examine
the narrator. A great narrator will make you fall into the story despite your intent
to analyze. Now go find your narrator.
This post is about Yesterday, the movie. IF YOU HAVEN’T SEEN IT, DO NOT READ FURTHER.
SPOILERS * SPOILERS * SPOILERS * and more SPOILERS *
I loved this movie. Jack Mallek awakens in a parallel universe where the Beatles never existed. As a frustrated musician in his own failed career, Jack claims to have written and plays the Beatle’s hits as his own and becomes famous as the greatest singer/songwriter in the world.
Burdened by guilt and oblivious to his best friend’s
devotion to him, Jack slowly discovers the differences between the two worlds.
Here’s what the movie did right:
Fresh, interesting concept that could be a lot
Jack Mallek is Indian but this is never brought
out as a focal point. It just is. Nice example to people with social concerns;
don’t make it a thing, just put it out there.
It’s clean. No swearing, no nudity, no sex, yet
works on multiple levels.
Rising tension presented by two people also from
his world who know he’s faking it. We know about them for a long time before
they confront Jack – and it’s a complete surprise (or at least not what Jack
and I expected).
The “fun & games” of the movie were Jack’s
rise to fame, him trying to remember the lyrics, his guilt, and his dawning
realization that he loves Ellie.
This is billed as a romantic comedy, yet the
romantic build is slow simmer rather than a focal point.
The writer/director understood that Jack needed
to think the leap was worth it. He did so in a unique and surprising way. The
door opened on someone other than I was expecting!
To reiterate an important point: Confrontations
were telegraphed… we KNEW what was going to happen, yet what took us by
surprise wasn’t just a twist, it made more sense than what we were expecting!
When the romance aspect came to head the first
time, timing wasn’t right. Second time, timing wasn’t right, third time timing
was right, but it didn’t matter, it was going to happen. The writer skillfully
built two parallel story lines that weaved in and out before coming to a satisfying
The means of the parallel world switch was never
revealed. So much so that many people think time was rewritten rather than Jack
being in a whole other world. Had they explained the workings, it:
A) Would no longer have been a
romantic comedy, and
B) No sequel would be necessary.
That’s right, the writer gave
himself an opening for a sequel. What is that opening? If Jack is in a parallel
universe, then he switched places with that world’s Jack, so that world’s Jack
is now on our world. What’s happening to him? What’s wonderfully crazy about
this sequel opportunity is that it doesn’t have to be the same genre. It could
be something else entirely: sci-fi, suspense, psychological thriller or psychological
comedy (more likely).
Response to Yesterday is mostly positive, though the critics think it was too
simple, lacked depth, lacked gravitas. Translation, it was too clean.
I think the world needs more clean
stories, more clean movies, more clean TV shows. I would love more movies like Yesterday.
As writers we are natural observers. Last week we talked
about mining your life for ideas. It’s not just events you need to be looking
at, but emotions.
To be fair, the only emotions you can analyze with any hope
of being accurate are your own. You can guess at someone else’s, but for that
actual feel, you only have your own.
Last week we found out our sweet little dog had advanced
diabetes. He’d lost a bunch of weight, and though he looked good, he felt
awful. You never can tell with dogs. He never complained, he was just listless,
couldn’t jump onto the couch anymore, but still, when the kids came home from
school to say goodbye, he rallied and put as much energy into his welcome as he
could. Emotions were high in our house. Denial, anger, blame… it was written
all over everyone’s face. Yet their actual experience? I only knew mine. At the
vet’s, every pet I had leaped around in my heart. This one, Thunder, was the
sweetest dog we’d ever had. My hand was on his chest when his heart stopped beating
and mine broke.
All that to say, first experience your emotions, later analyze them with a little
distance. Don’t try to analyze your emotions as you’re feeling them in response
to an event (there may be times you should, but we’re talking life’s ups and
downs, not pathology). Just as in quantum physics, the observer changes the observed.
Trying to overlay intellectual analysis over emotional reaction will rob you of
the emotion. Be human and feel first. Analyze later.
What, exactly should you analyze? Actions that stem from emotions. A story suffers
when the feeling is described, instead, show it. What are your emotional
markers? Do your eyes tear up? Does a vein throb? How do you cry – in hitches?
In wracking sobs? What does it look like when you hold back? (I absolutely know
there is nothing wrong with crying; I will also do everything in my power not
to. My jaw will hurt, and my face feels rubbery from the effort, but tears are
for alone time. Yeah, it’s messed up, but it’s me.)
People who suffer from PTSD or anxiety have triggers. Touch
a trigger and they’ll go off. They won’t make any sense until you understand what
they came from. Want me to go off? Throw me into water that is dark beneath my
feet. Dread steels over me. Let’s just say it’s a good thing my shorts would
already be wet. While this isn’t truly a trigger, it’s close. I freak out
because anything could be coming up
from below. Yes, I’d almost drowned once when I couldn’t see the ocean floor,
but it’s really knowing all the things down there.
If you’re writing a series, your character’s triggers don’t
have to be explained in the book we first see it. If you aren’t writing a series,
main character triggers do have to be explained. Imagine the tension is rising
in the climax of your story and suddenly a trigger is sprung. CHAOS! Cool. Even better is when a trigger is sprung
and the character doesn’t jump because it’s been dealt with in the course of
Your emotions and the actions of others can be analyzed.
Your job is to show the emotion, not describe it (resist the urge, even in
first person narrative). Just remember to feel your emotions first. We aren’t
breeding psychopaths here.
After an amazing week with family who live 3000 miles away
from my home. There for the marriage of my beautiful niece, there was enough
grist for future stories of all kinds. Sometimes you need to push reality a bit
to create fiction, sometimes you have to pull it back.
Night before leaving, my flight was cancelled. I had to rebook to a full flight where I was wedged between two large football players in shorts, tank tops, and body hair. Ewwww!
Being cheap, I agreed to an online deal of low cost and the carrier picks the car. I was expecting a Ford Focus, or a Leaf, maybe a Smart Car. I got a convertible Mustang GT that growled like a lion, not a horse. SWEET! But…. stop and go traffic for three hours (which should have been an hour), 30-degree weather which made putting the top down chilly (I did it anyway).
Family stuff which was rich with content and seeing my sister’s new house for the first time.
Waking up at 6 am to discover chaos as the wedding officiate and bridesmaid were both sick. My future niece-in-law stepped into the bridesmaid role and yours truly officiated the wedding. 😊
That afternoon, we troop to the winery where the wedding was being held and slip into the groom’s room, where a glass of $300 scotch was offered. Very, very smooth. The groomsmen had been drinking all day (you can see where this is heading).
Set up, figuring out the order of service, planning what I would say, and hanging lights…
An amazing service with just the right amount of humor and seriousness. They opted for private vows at the license signing for just the wedding party. Good choice, the bridesmaids were bawling and the groomsmen were drunk.
Followed by more drinking and appetizers (great crab cakes!).
Then a wonderful dinner, gelato instead of cake (oh my GOSH are we programmed for cake… I’ve been jonesing for cake ever since). And more drinking.
A beautiful toast by my other amazing niece, followed by a drunken toast by the best man.
Dancing. Very uncomfortable, drunken dancing (I can’t dance, not won’t, can’t, it’s a pain thing), but some women were not happy with that at all.
A car decorated with phrases and graphics that would make this blog X-rated…
As designated driver, I drove someone’s van home despite her assurance she could drive in that drunken condition and did it all the time. She gave up her keys willingly.
Driving a van with floor branches that crowded the cargo bay tickling my ears and the back of my neck.
The next day was wine tasting (4 good wines, 12 bad ones, in my opinion).
Then a blast of fish bake meal.
Some more family stuff the next day, and then I was flying out again. It was 9:05 am flight that I had to leave at 5:00 am to make.
Another full flight, this time sitting with a sweet pastor and his wife on the way to a church convention.
When I get home, it’s to a sick dog who we found out the next day has diabetes, so we’ll be saying goodbye to my sweet puppy (and the away kids are driving down as I write to say their goodbyes).
That was just a short week and there’s enough material there
(and more I didn’t write above) to fuel realism in several future stories,
perhaps in different settings, different events, different locations, but the
seeds were found here.
Now, you may be the type who writes such things down so you
have them when you’re ready to write. That’s fine. I prefer my memories to sink
into the subconscious where they can percolate and eventually worm their way
into my work. Either method works, but with mine, fictionalization is virtually
Mine your days, observe, analyze, and allow to steep. Your
life is more like a story than you know.
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